NathanVonMe

It was used twice to show that the similarities between how she acted at the beginning and how he acted now. Yes, there was a parallel.

Sounded very natural. Simple story, but nice execution.

Very nice descriptions early on.

I think you were trying too hard. :/

Story was originally around 1,600 words. Had to do some serious editing. The original, of course, had a lot of ideas I wish I could've included, but I think I did the best I could with a 800 word limit.

Comments welcome.

I almost did this, nj.

I thought about doing this idea.

Text is poor.

nice design elements.

needs color.

too busy.

Not a very distinct 'brain'

like the colors.

Outerglow looks bad.

Not a fan of the red/black color scheme.

Image looks low quality - although I like the idea.
Poor text/font choice though.

image looks low quality/pixelated.

Could have had better color choices.

Make it bigger - I like the idea.

I like the orange line idea. Iffy on the blue dots.

Needs more vibrant colors than greys and dark blues.

Font is a big too over the top. try something simple next time.

Nice colors, but a bit too simple imo.

Simple but nice.

Logo is much too chaotic and doesn't flow well.