Bonus: Advanced Poetry - Summer Ballad

Bonus: Advanced Poetry - Summer Ballad

Contest ended 3 years ago 6/27/2008 12:00:00 AM EDT

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  • Cost: 10 credits
  • Jackpot: 100 credits

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First Place
# 1
6

Refrain:

To dark of night the daylight yields,
And in the shadow slides.
All that remains in silent fields:
The lights of fireflies.

(I)
She's walking home in bleak twilight,
A solitary girl.
She stands in woods and greets the eve;
Her heart's laments unfurl.

(II)
She looks above through violet eyes
And ponders all she's lost;
Her tears fall down; she stands alone
Her dreams so cruelly tossed.

To dark of night the daylight yields,
And in the shadow slides.
All that remains in silent fields:
The lights of fireflies.

(III)
Did friends desert? Did lovers fail?
Must summer fall away?
The questions ring as her hope fades
Glad moments cannot stay.

(IV)
Alone again, as oft she seems
A chill comes creeping in.
The warmth inside is drawn from her
As punishment for sin.

To dark of night the daylight yields,
And in the shadow slides.
All that remains in silent fields:
The lights of fireflies.

(V)
A light blinks faint along her path
A glow to guide the way.
Her tiny friend is resting here
Late on the August day.

(VI)
Her spirits lift with that one light
It seems her burdens dim.
Though dark times come, again she's sure
That summer's warmth will win.

To dark of night the daylight yields,
And in the shadow slides.
All that remains in silent fields:
The lights of fireflies.

Word count: 230
 
Second Place
# 2
By sickboy22 (Score: 7.351)
4

you see them all summer, parading around
a jumble of colors, and giggling sounds
they’re dreaming of true love, but heartache abounds
when the boys hang around
where the girls walk around

the old folks, all sit there, just shaking their heads
forgetting, it used to be them there instead
they no longer dream, they just stare at the ground
when the girls walk around
where the boys hang around


the clothes that they wear are just barely there
that jumble of colors is really their hair
they live for the moment and don’t really care
they’re looking for one that is right
maybe they’ll find them tonight


they walk hand in hand, the occasional pair
their envious friends can only just stare
they don’t understand what it takes to be there
and the boys keep hanging around
where the girls walk around

you see them once more, and he’s already gone
dismissed for some reason or gone on his own
the sun’s still shining and they’re moving on
and the girls keep walking around
where the boys hang around


the clothes that they wear are just barely there
that jumble of colors is really their hair
they live for the moment and don’t really care
they’re looking for one that is right
maybe they’ll find them tonight

maybe they’ll find them tonight

Word count: 223
 
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Third Place
# 3
By dhizzle230 (Score: 6.624)
3

Its raining now outside
the trees are drooping low with the weight
and the men walk quickly and with purpose
like the birds fly fast so the water willl not soak them to the bone.

the sun will not come
the rain will continue to fall
hard and dark
cold and wet

until my eyes can rest
and my chest can expand
and contract again
without taking in water.

My breath is heavy,
and my heart pumps slow and it crawls
almost to a hault.
It squeezes itself.

Soon it wil freeze and crack and shatter
if it gets cold enough.
Without the sunshine.
The brightness. The warmth.

My eyes are tired of darkness,
and my heart is tired of almost stopping.
When I see her
it is like a mirage.

It is like the sun coming out from the clouds,
breaking through with beauty and might and grace
and sending the rain
to the back of my mind.

When I see her
my eyes quarrel with the concept
of receiving both rest and excruciating excitement.
my heart fights the same fight with itself.

My stomach as well.
My chest contracts and expands at the same time.
When she smiles and laughs
and runs with her arms out

and she says she loves me
and we collide in an embrace that shakes the stars
I am experiencing the sun,
in all of its glory,

dispersing the rain into steam,
and extinguishing the clouds.
In thrree months the weather will change

and the rain will stop coming every day and night
when the sun is not near.

And I need the sun
so desperately.

Word count: 273
 
4
By DaisyKJ (Score: 6.132)
1

Goodbye, July...you're all filled now with memories.
Through your long days I've learned a thing or two.
I've found that loving doesn't just come easy...
Somehow, it's changed my life--me, knowing you.

Goodbye, July...your summer's quickly fading.
It's hard to know just where I'll go from here.
Should I go wrong, if bitterness should claim me,
I'll love again when you come around next year.

Goodbye, July...your page is quickly turning.
I don't see why they say that summer's slow...
This is the last one I'll spend being sixteen,
And I don't want to tell August "hello".

Word count: 100
Please do not critique my entry.
 
5
By alyens1985 (Score: 5.571)
2

Summer angel

My love for a goddess … is trapped … inside me
I cannot love her,even if I do … because I’m cursed
I love her like a madman … I think that maybe she …
I lie myself in every second … and every time I dream at her …

She is my sun in every summer,
She is my moon in every night,
She is my dream ... my fantasy
She is my summer angel


She’s far away … and yet so close to me …
But I can’t touch her … I cannot kiss those goddess lips
I only think that she’s my angel , I think that maybe she …
…’ll be mine this lifetime but … is just a dream that hurts … but her I miss …

She is my sun in every summer,
She is my moon in every night,
She is my dream ... my fantasy
She is my summer angel


She’ll always be the princess in the castle from my heart …
She’ll be the queen that rules my every thought,
She’ll be all I’ve ever wanted … she’s all I think about ,
But now … my love for her … is trapped inside my soul …

She is my sun in every summer,
She is my moon in every night,
She is my dream ... my fantasy
She is my summer angel


My love for her … is just a taste of past …
My love for her … is just a drop of dust …
My love for her … is just a memory that kills me …
… every day and every summer by keeping me alive … my love for … a summer angel !

Word count: 256
 

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