Short Lived by Groggie
10th place entry in Bonus: Poetry - Quatrain

My first breath- it would be my very first first.
A burst of fresh air into my lungs it burst.
The blue in my face faced the pale ceiling blue.
I'm new here, but I knew I'd not be here past "new."

Dead where I lay, yet still not quite dead.
My head was mess, but was not just my head.
The sky was as red as a red tinted sky.
A sigh of relief was my last breath; a sigh.

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  • Sponsor: whazzat
  • Entered: 7/24/2007 12:53:09 PM
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  • Rank: 10/21
  • Votes: 18
  • Score: 5.613
  • Views: 363
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